Sunday 25 February 2018

4MR Freya's incredible story writing!

Year 4 are currently being taught how to write African stories in English and have made an incredible start!

Freya's story writing has blown us away with her descriptive language and important theme.

Here is the first half of the story. We can't wait to see how the story develops and ends!

It was a scorching hot day in the grasslands of Africa. The trees were lifeless, offering no shade to the poor animals. Some just strong enough for the smallest of birds to perch on. An enormous elephant stomped by. His skin as dry as a rock. Elephant had two enormous ears, four plump, stubby legs and a small, boring nose.
Poor Elephant got bullied by all the other animals for having such a stubby nose. "Look at my magnificent beak," squawked Vulture. 
"Look at my velvety nose," declared Zebra.
Elephant was never allowed to join in with their games. One day, Elephant decided he'd had enough of their mean ways. He was going to prove to them that he was to be treated equally. 
He strode into the middle of the savanna to see all the animals lying on the floor, craving water. He had decided what he was going to do. "I'm going to search for water. When I'm back, you will all be begging me for a drop!" he declared. The animals laughed with all the energy they had left. When Elephant had gone, they whispered and chatted about how silly Elephant was.
Elephant had started his journey when he thought he heard some mysterious cackling. He thought it was just him remembering the animals laughing at his nose. Then it got louder. Elephant grew scared. Turn back or keep going - what will Elephant do?


Well done, Freya! A truly incredible start!

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